I like the design and how you went with a more non direct way of the story. It does how ever feel a little bit to indirect, but it make sense. Maybe you can add/change the last Audio icon or add something so the last ear isn't just a blank.
It needs the third ear, but you can change something within it to make it deaf. Think about what other symbol can represent the perception of sound. Typography-wise—it is not there yet. If you go to the acoustic aria. Check the typography for that: similar to the eye charts, they have audio charts, sound waves, graphs—-all that set of elements. Find the most appropriate and visually intriguing and apply to your poster.
Compositionally, you are just guessing about the type. Go to the source. Good luck.
hummm okay now that I look at it this way, I say you keep the audio icon + waves like the originals and change the ear to something else completely. Sorry for the mix up.
Elisa, on you are progressing nicely, but you are there yet. Keep working. At the first glance, I sort of missed #1 and I thought that if you combine last two—it might be your solution—long waves all the way to the wall. Or just long waves. They are impressive, but they hurt the balance of your composition composition and it is a very close solution to Christians' and confuses the hearing with the listening. ...and then I looked back at #1 and really appreciate your concept. It is not so much about the sound, but about the TRUST. Ears are still there on the third stage, but the message is not heard anymore.
Typography is not there because it is too elegant and classy, not technical to match your image. Also, if you have "!" at the end, you need to treat it as hanging punctuation‚ out of the type block. I don't think it should be a block. there is no conceptual and visual connection with your image yet.
Just a suggestion.
Olga
Elisa, you are totally free to make your decision.
Elisa, on you are progressing nicely, but you are there yet. Keep working. At the first glance, I sort of missed #1 and I thought that if you combine last two—it might be your solution—long waves all the way to the wall. Or just long waves. They are impressive, but they hurt the balance of your composition composition and it is a very close solution to Christians' and confuses the hearing with the listening. ...and then I looked back at #1 and really appreciate your concept. It is not so much about the sound, but about the TRUST. Ears are still there on the third stage, but the message is not heard anymore.
Typography is not there because it is too elegant and classy, not technical to match your image. Also, if you have "!" at the end, you need to treat it as hanging punctuation‚ out of the type block. I don't think it should be a block. there is no conceptual and visual connection with your image yet.
Just a suggestion. Elisa, you are totally free to stop, to work more and to make your final decision
If you are worried about the waves extending out to far and not flowing with the overall composition, maybe you can put some transparency on the waves and fade it out as it gets larger.
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I like the design and how you went with a more non direct way of the story. It does how ever feel a little bit to indirect, but it make sense. Maybe you can add/change the last Audio icon or add something so the last ear isn't just a blank.
I agree.
It needs the third ear, but you can change something within it to make it deaf. Think about what other symbol can represent the perception of sound. Typography-wise—it is not there yet. If you go to the acoustic aria. Check the typography for that: similar to the eye charts, they have audio charts, sound waves, graphs—-all that set of elements. Find the most appropriate and visually intriguing and apply to your poster.
Compositionally, you are just guessing about the type. Go to the source. Good luck.
Olga
hummm okay now that I look at it this way, I say you keep the audio icon + waves like the originals and change the ear to something else completely. Sorry for the mix up.
just a thought... maybe you can extend the Audio waves further to show that it goes on forever, just to prove that there is no one there.
good idea... thanks a ton for all the help. im still open to suggestions! im almost there i think, but not 100% .
-elisa
Nice job. I like the last revision. It is really simple and gets the point out.
Thank you, Eddy, for making our discussion alive.
Elisa, on you are progressing nicely, but you are there yet. Keep working. At the first glance, I sort of missed #1 and I thought that if you combine last two—it might be your solution—long waves all the way to the wall. Or just long waves. They are impressive, but they hurt the balance of your composition composition and it is a very close solution to Christians' and confuses the hearing with the listening.
...and then I looked back at #1 and really appreciate your concept. It is not so much about the sound, but about the TRUST. Ears are still there on the third stage, but the message is not heard anymore.
Typography is not there because it is too elegant and classy, not technical to match your image. Also, if you have "!" at the end, you need to treat it as hanging punctuation‚ out of the type block. I don't think it should be a block. there is no conceptual and visual connection with your image yet.
Just a suggestion.
Olga
Elisa, you are totally free to make your decision.
Thank you, Eddy, for making our discussion alive.
Elisa, on you are progressing nicely, but you are there yet. Keep working. At the first glance, I sort of missed #1 and I thought that if you combine last two—it might be your solution—long waves all the way to the wall. Or just long waves. They are impressive, but they hurt the balance of your composition composition and it is a very close solution to Christians' and confuses the hearing with the listening.
...and then I looked back at #1 and really appreciate your concept. It is not so much about the sound, but about the TRUST. Ears are still there on the third stage, but the message is not heard anymore.
Typography is not there because it is too elegant and classy, not technical to match your image. Also, if you have "!" at the end, you need to treat it as hanging punctuation‚ out of the type block. I don't think it should be a block. there is no conceptual and visual connection with your image yet.
Just a suggestion. Elisa, you are totally free to stop, to work more and to make your final decision
Olga
Oops! Sorry for a double message—I was about to send the third one : )
If you are worried about the waves extending out to far and not flowing with the overall composition, maybe you can put some transparency on the waves and fade it out as it gets larger.
good luck.
i like the first one =) good job elisa
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